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    Author: KindredSpirit
    ASL Info:    20, Male, Burlington Iowa
    Elite Ratio:    2.37 - 46/71/90
    Words: 72
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 19
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    I search for empathy,
    In your pity... For eternity
    I'm binded to the things you say.

    I remain weak,
    For the bleak... In what you seek
    Just to be the one with you today.

    I'm hectic,
    Still rejected... Ill connected
    To the things that you want me to be.

    I realized,
    Your lies... Forever lost in your eyes
    I molded myself to be... Exactly what you wanted to see.




    Submitted on 2009-11-03 13:33:27     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      The things we do for love.
    like turning your back on your friend so you can wipe away your tears before he notices and then smiling while you hand back his heart. or letting your bf talk you to death because what he is talking about is important to him(just not to you). I do everything for love. however no matter what you do, you always lose somehow. your poem reminded me of changing yourself to match their prefect spouse. I do that oh! so well. I loved it..as usual. good job!
    -Rachel:)
    | Posted on 2009-11-04 00:00:00 | by PopRocksRae | [ Reply to This ]


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