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Submission Name:
Silent Mistakes
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Author:
Childe-Wrote
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219
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Poetry/Sorry
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Silent Mistakes
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Paralyzed by fear
When questions are thrown
The disappointment she caused
To strong to undermine these accusations
And when she lost her voice
After going round and round in frustration
Tears spill down her bruised face
As her mistakes scream her name in vain
Another night fell upon the yard
And the moon came out to play
As the sun went back in for rest
Her unkept promises went too far
Having kept that secret torn at her soul
Against bared-teeth and clashing claws
With disapproval against her choices
She refused to let them see her break
So she does all she can to stand on both feet
But living two seperate lives
And the fear of this facade breakin
Causes her to crutinize her behavior
As the sun came out to play
It's another day to beat the odds
When she puts on that broken smile
And solemnly gives it another try
Oh silly girl, your not Cinderella
Come inside before the clock strikes twelve
And perhaps the questions are still there
For who shall shake their head in distaste
Before you fall on your face
Stand on those two feet
And face your demons
This is a war
And you just lost the battle
Submitted on 2009-11-03 13:52:20
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