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    dots Submission Name: Living A Mistakedots
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    Author: Childe-Wrote
    Elite Ratio:    1.86 - 17/47/39
    Words: 151
    Class/Type: Poetry/Sorry
    Total Views: 24
    Average Vote:    4.0000
    Bytes: 1028



    Description:
       A silent apology for the disappointment I caused


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    dotsLiving A Mistakedots
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    Paralyzed by fear
    Questions thrown at her

    Disappointment too strong
    Loosing her only voice

    When she has to fall
    For her mistakes to burn

    Promised many far to much
    Keeping a little one her secret
    Tires out a young heart and soul

    Against all disapproval
    She stands tall on both feet

    Between a student living her life
    And a mother making it on her own

    It's another day to beat the odds
    With the very tears she shed

    For one night of magical romance
    She's paying the price with her mistake

    Choking back the words
    When she looks at that angel

    Don't you know a thing?
    She'll just be her adorable secret

    When there's no one to blame
    But thy self when the clock struck 12

    The question yet to answer
    Who will she disappoint next?

    We shall see




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