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    dots Submission Name: Silent Mistakesdots

    Author: Childe-Wrote
    Elite Ratio:    1.78 - 17/53/44
    Words: 219
    Class/Type: Poetry/Sorry
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    dotsSilent Mistakesdots

    Paralyzed by fear
    When questions are thrown

    The disappointment she caused
    To strong to undermine these accusations

    And when she lost her voice
    After going round and round in frustration

    Tears spill down her bruised face
    As her mistakes scream her name in vain

    Another night fell upon the yard
    And the moon came out to play
    As the sun went back in for rest

    Her unkept promises went too far
    Having kept that secret torn at her soul

    Against bared-teeth and clashing claws
    With disapproval against her choices

    She refused to let them see her break
    So she does all she can to stand on both feet

    But living two seperate lives
    And the fear of this facade breakin
    Causes her to crutinize her behavior

    As the sun came out to play
    It's another day to beat the odds
    When she puts on that broken smile
    And solemnly gives it another try

    Oh silly girl, your not Cinderella
    Come inside before the clock strikes twelve

    And perhaps the questions are still there
    For who shall shake their head in distaste

    Before you fall on your face
    Stand on those two feet
    And face your demons

    This is a war
    And you just lost the battle

    Submitted on 2009-11-03 13:52:20     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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