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    dots Submission Name: I, The Heartbreakerdots

    Author: Eyamma
    ASL Info:    16/Sry, I'm taken/Alabama
    Elite Ratio:    4.71 - 22/21/77
    Words: 273
    Class/Type: Deep Thought/Love
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    dotsI, The Heartbreakerdots

    You give your heart to another
    In love with a heart that is taken
    Just as you think your heart is breaking
    You see through

    Crying out, crying out to no one at all
    Apparently, all along, this love was void,
    Till the end
    How to rebuild a lifetime of heartache?

    Is it fair, to throw out one for the other?
    Or leave this love for the crows?
    It's in your smiles, it's when your close to me
    That I know, there is no one at all,

    That can ever compare, to those deeply hurt eyes,
    a clear, blue ocean of memories
    It leaves me with a heavy, hollow heart

    We've tried so hard to be
    But the ends are still loose, there are so many alone
    It seems like nothing, nothing at all
    For all the years lost in our fall

    If only we could face it
    Let loose the regret
    Shed some light on the truth
    Maybe our hearts would heal,
    Slowly let time congeal

    But it'd be so wrong to say the I've moved on
    For all the torment and the pain,
    It was all because of you
    Yet here we are, years apart
    Far from ever seeing the light

    In the end, my love corrupted
    A catch;
    For one to love, there is a price to pay
    The deal with the devil is never fair

    Why, oh, why?
    Why couldn't I have seen it before it was too late?

    In the end we are all destined to live our lives alone
    Or suffer the guilt,
    Of the tender, tumultuous heartbreaker

    Submitted on 2009-11-03 14:41:35     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I have to admit, pieces of this sound complainy to me, which doesnt make for great poetry, but the overall thought and feeling was incredible and i think anyone who has every been through a badly ending relationship can relate, including myself.

    No matter how much time passes you will still feel a twing of pain, loss and regret as you look back.

    Im sorry for your struggle.
    Keep writing!
    | Posted on 2009-11-03 00:00:00 | by dthforeverpain8 | [ Reply to This ]

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