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    dots Submission Name: Little Kid (In a Candy Shop)dots
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    Author: bloddyrazorgirl
    ASL Info:    18/f/az
    Elite Ratio:    1.32 - 37/34/40
    Words: 112
    Class/Type: Poetry/Venting
    Total Views: 13
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 668



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       i wrote this to my ex Chris Bronson


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    dotsLittle Kid (In a Candy Shop)dots
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    I'm a little kid in a candy shop
    Watching you act insane as you realize
    That you don't have enough change
    For what you really want
    Yeah and I'm a little kid in a candy shop
    Watching you try and manipulate me
    Thinking that with the right words
    You can change the price
    But let me tell you something baby
    I am just too sweet to be wasting my time
    And nothing you do or say
    Is going to change my mind
    So take your change and your pride
    And spend them on something
    With a price not as high
    Because you will never be able to afford
    A girl like me




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