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    dots Submission Name: Perfume Of Karmadots
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    Author: LovelyGoddess
    ASL Info:    21/F/SC
    Elite Ratio:    2.69 - 138/95/104
    Words: 106
    Class/Type: Poetry/I hate you
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    dotsPerfume Of Karmadots
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    I couldn't breathe
    my every breath filled with the perfume of your lie

    I asked myself why I believed you
    nor brain or heart could give reply

    You'd gladly ask me to surrender my life
    knowing me, I probably would kill myself.

    And I'm intoxicated with your putrid form
    I tempt myself with your kiss, touch, taste, and smell

    I pray nightly for karma to descend
    to rip your heart, receive your punishment and due

    Maybe if you were denied and dead
    finally I would forget, cease loving you




    Submitted on 2009-11-03 16:05:27     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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