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    dots Submission Name: Everlasting Remainsdots
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    Author: dthforeverpain8
    ASL Info:    15/Female/tmon
    Elite Ratio:    3.36 - 92/158/234
    Words: 288
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 15
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1893



    Description:
       I am vaguely aware that some parts of this make very little sense...


    YES QUOTES FROM VAN HELSING :P

    But its whatever, not like it truly matters


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    dotsEverlasting Remainsdots
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    Can lying make things better?
    Can crying make the pain go away?
    There are no answers
    No feelings left
    In the cold bodied corpse
    Abandoned in the sun
    Is this what they call fun?
    Because they smile through their tears
    As if they are doing the right thing
    By watching me suffer
    Alone
    I cannot show my true self
    So I become
    Invisible
    Solitude has always been my basis at home
    But when it creeps into my social life
    What then do I have left but tears?
    I may not be an outcast
    I have too deep of bonds
    With the wrong people
    But I love them
    And could not for the life of me
    Force them away
    Do I look healthy to you?
    Tear stained face that never dries
    Scratches ripping
    Through my lies
    Bitten deep into my skin.
    Every time my fist aches
    It is because of you
    Every time my heart falters
    Skipping a beat in abnormal sorrow
    It is you that boils my insides
    You cause me to lie
    Your name is written on every tear I cry
    But that is no enough
    You will continue to keep taking
    Keep prying your way into me
    Until there is nothing left to understand
    Because there is no person left underneath
    For this I shut my mouth
    And continue lying
    I cannot be
    Nothing.
    "Please, say you will not try again.
    My heart could not bear the sorrow,
    If we fail again.”
    "Come.
    Do not fear me.
    Everybody else fears me.”
    “Yes, yes,
    We will try again."
    Until our blood runs cold
    And our eyes blink red.
    No amount of kindness
    Can erase you from these veins
    I am yours,
    Your failure
    Your everlasting remains




    Submitted on 2009-11-03 16:15:11     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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