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Away From The Influence

Author: LovelyGoddess
ASL Info:    21/F/SC
Elite Ratio:    2.69 - 138 /95 /104
Words: 171
Class/Type: Poetry /Them
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Away From The Influence

I'm eternally falling, falling, falling
hearing the angel of reproach calling, calling.
Trickle of blood rivers my mouth.
Clear water sky mirrors my doubt.
I'll close my eyes, ignore the sounds,
take the hate and turn it around,
apologize for all my failures and sins,
cry for the things i couldn't do back then.
And now, I'm still worthless, ignorant.
You hate me because I'm trying to change.
Either dying or living claims me insane.
I don't mean to reign on your parade
but this guilt is your icy steel cage.
Where are my wings, you have clipped them?
Where are my defenses, did u nip them?
Point your fingers, continue to condemn.
As long as I'm falling, I'll hide my face.
When I'm falling, I'll continue disgraced.
All I want to do is fall away from your influence,
stop smelling your rancid fragrance,
to stop being your childlike presence.
I'll continue saying adieu, boohoo.
You can cry eternally, flowing tears spew,
just tell me how i can cease being you.

Submitted on 2009-11-03 18:42:59     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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