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    Author: teekie
    ASL Info:    18/f/ma
    Elite Ratio:    1.12 - 5/27/21
    Words: 137
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
    Total Views: 605
    Average Vote:    4.0000
    Bytes: 885



    Description:
       A good friend once said that i'm not the only one getting hurt in a situation but the people who kno about the situation is too so this is where this came from. . . and don't mind the name i couldn't think of one yet . . .but tell me what u think i havn't wrote anything in a while so hope u enjoy thanks


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    The scares under my shelves

    shows the secrets hidden deep

    the longest one

    shows a life that shouldn't be

    because the pain and torment

    is not worth life to me

    the memories itself will kill you

    the smile stays on

    while i try to stay strong

    but when i'm alone

    the mind takes over

    and the tears begin to fall

    i can't help but to think

    i hurt my friends

    with this secret i keep

    quiet i began

    quiet i will remain

    until i figure out how to end his game

    so for this i am truly sorry

    i everyone i hurt

    with this deadly secret

    killing me inside





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