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hidden deep


Author: teekie
ASL Info:    18/f/ma
Elite Ratio:    1.12 - 5 /27 /21
Words: 137
Class/Type: Poetry /Depressed
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A good friend once said that i'm not the only one getting hurt in a situation but the people who kno about the situation is too so this is where this came from. . . and don't mind the name i couldn't think of one yet . . .but tell me what u think i havn't wrote anything in a while so hope u enjoy thanks


hidden deep



The scares under my shelves

shows the secrets hidden deep

the longest one

shows a life that shouldn't be

because the pain and torment

is not worth life to me

the memories itself will kill you

the smile stays on

while i try to stay strong

but when i'm alone

the mind takes over

and the tears begin to fall

i can't help but to think

i hurt my friends

with this secret i keep

quiet i began

quiet i will remain

until i figure out how to end his game

so for this i am truly sorry

i everyone i hurt

with this deadly secret

killing me inside





Submitted on 2009-11-04 00:06:47     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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