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    dots Submission Name: Dreamingdots

    Author: arod44
    Elite Ratio:    8 - 2/0/3
    Words: 145
    Class/Type: Poetry/Dark
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       It's about the way I feel when I'm dreaming, because to me dreams are sort of an escape.. I wrote for my own entertainment, not meaning for anyone else to hear but now that i think of it it's kind of an ehh poem. Any thoughts for a revision?

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    the night penetrates into my soul
    consumes my thoughts into one
    creates vivid images that run
    ahead of time with no reason

    they play in me and I am there
    the sounds are mute yet I hear
    the faces are blurry but I know
    yet when morning comes I donít

    my eyes are forced shut but I see
    my senses are numb but I feel
    my lips are paired but I speak
    my body is vulnerable as I sleep

    the thoughts that were suppressed
    become alive and chase me through
    the open vast of oblivion that is
    my mind when it is susceptible

    my name is unknown to me but
    in this dream I know who I am
    though I am a third object I watch
    as she makes her way into desire

    Submitted on 2009-11-04 00:58:44     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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