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    dots Submission Name: Love Makingdots
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    Author: strike three
    ASL Info:    32/m/Ethiopia
    Elite Ratio:    3.32 - 49/54/28
    Words: 58
    Class/Type: Poetry/Passion
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    dotsLove Makingdots
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    Silk. Slip. Contour. Curves.
    Effortless. Noiseless. Gliding. Swerves.
    Delicate. Breath. Silk. Fall.
    Naked. Soft. Whisper. Call.

    Scent. Warm. Hot. Air.
    Light. Warm. Glow. Hair.
    Touch. Need. Lips. Wet.
    Taste. Bounce. Both. Breast.

    Sweat. Sweat. Fast. Last.
    Scream. Moan. Cry. Blast.
    Breathe. Kiss. Squeeze. Hug.
    Love. Cuddle. Sleep. Snug.




    Submitted on 2009-11-04 08:55:25     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I love the pause between every word- it drags it out while, also, pointing out the opposite. The only complaint - the second line holds two( -less ) ending words which, does not jibe very well with the rest of the poem's pace. :)
    | Posted on 2009-11-06 00:00:00 | by isis_lenore | [ Reply to This ]


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