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    dots Submission Name: Falling Through the Ceilingdots
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    Author: TheStillSilence
    ASL Info:    20/F/Out in Outer Space
    Elite Ratio:    5.1 - 180/107/54
    Words: 52
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 788
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    Description:
       Beginning of a piece. Inspired by the instrumental of "Hello" by Blackfield.


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    dotsFalling Through the Ceilingdots
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    Another step is broken,
    I'm falling, the floor around me opens;
    Swallow all my faults but,
    I'm standing, the concrete floor feels colder

    Close myself completely,
    In hollow, and numbness that won't leave me
    And inside
    The wars I range, still bleeding
    I am, falling through the ceiling.




    Submitted on 2009-11-04 17:08:34     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I can't find exactly the words to describe the feeling I have from this poem but it works. I like your play with the words, the rhythm and the off rhymes all work wonderfully.
    | Posted on 2009-11-05 00:00:00 | by my shadow | [ Reply to This ]


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