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    dots Submission Name: Hyenadots
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    Author: Shadowstar13
    Elite Ratio:    4.73 - 191/191/129
    Words: 174
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    Description:
       Needed a little ego-boosting. Deal with it...

    I always thought that if I was an animal, I'd be a hyena. No, I do not eat babies and I am not a hermaphrodite. However, I do come off... badly, I must say, as hyenas do. I have areas of my reputation that I haven't actually earned-much like there's no evidence that hyenas DO eat babies, I'm not quite so mean as I like to think I am. I can probably come up with other analogies, but I'm too damn tired and messed in the head right now...


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    dotsHyenadots
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    I hope, I pray, I scream, I play
    And now that you know there's nothing more I can say
    Lies, lies-always another line
    Although this endless sporadicy is hard to define

    I'm fighting hard for breath, trying to ignite
    Ice and ether nova, a riot incite
    I will find the forest parth, what, where the hell it may be
    You wanna see what a scavenger can do?

    JUST LOOK AT ME.

    Little lioness with the walk of a bear
    Ears of wolf here and nose of cat there
    But I've got a skin, a mind, and fangs all mine own
    Laughing eyes, laughing cries and a madness I own
    I'm a crocotta and we never truly fall
    Slink low, strike high, escape the anti-wall

    Searching for a heartbeat, I'm frothing lost without a pulse
    But for now, this soul will breathe with walking solo
    There's nothing more I can say, nothing more I can be:

    You want to see what a scavenger can do?
    Hell, look at me.




    Submitted on 2009-11-04 17:29:16     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Didn't I comment on this? Am I hallucinating? Or did I write it only in my head? This is the scary part, I remember doing this already.... ok, let's try again.

    I re-read this from my 2-3 reads yesterday (when I commented in a parallel universe on your piece, and drank a cold cola doing it... I remember doing it, damn it!)

    I loved the little lioness/bear comparison, that made me grin. We all need a little cat in us, even if it's 368 lbs. with teeth bigger than Ron Jeremy's.... whoa! There I go again, 'scuse me...

    I thought it was cleverly written, the skin and teeth and fangs all my own.... It sounds dress-up, like a girl in a costume, and I like that... You identify it in that part as not really part of you, but your swag... how you represent. I loved that. It set it apart from the split/conflict. You wear it, and you hand-picked it to wear and know how to use every inch of it... YOU GO GIRL, yeah!!!!!

    PS: Hyena... no one has ever told me that before, that they'd pick hyena. I use to pick Wolf; I don't particularly like them or think they're beautiful, but I certainly identify with them and feel like one half the time... I think either I give them too much credit, or they're pretty complicated if they realize what/where they are, which they seem to...

    Dingo's... are those hyenas?
    | Posted on 2009-11-06 00:00:00 | by Runes | [ Reply to This ]
      An interesting parallel drawn from a misunderstood person to a misunderstood creature. Yet, there is something else said here between the lines, which is not about you at all. That is, the quickness of mind and rash unreasoning that causes people to come to conclusions without knowing the full story.

    Fact of the matter is, hyenas are useful. They have the strongest jaws in the mammal kingdom; strong enough to crush bones where others fail. Hyenas are also social animals; though they rarely associate with those outside their kind. Misfits seem to function in a similar manner, which is unfortunate. Well, I figure it's the loss of the world to make such brazen assumptions. They shun the misfit, the eccentric, and yet they love to read our poetry, our stories; listen to our songs.

    What a boring, (and smelly) world it would be without this niche filled.

    My favourite part of this is

    Little lioness with the walk of a bear,
    Ears of wolf here and nose of cat there...

    The way I took this is that you are a creature of many shapes and colours, not so single-minded as people might assume. Your personality is vast, your emotions powerful and maybe a little unhinged. But there is more to you, much more. Well, as long as people continue to view it this way, you are like a well-kept secret, only to be revealed to those who take more than a moment to consider your true nature. You can continue to slink into the shadows, but you'll do it all with a wink. Because you know something others dare not think.

    soul-hugger
    | Posted on 2009-11-05 00:00:00 | by Soul-Hugger | [ Reply to This ]


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