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    dots Submission Name: Tear N taredots
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    Author: KeeperOfLight
    ASL Info:    23, Vancouver BC
    Elite Ratio:    2.55 - 41/64/76
    Words: 202
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Love
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    dotsTear N taredots
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    All I can to is tear ní tare, tear ní tare
    to rip out all of me so I can be with you
    tear ní tare, tear ní tare, tear ní tare

    I cry cry and cry
    my heart leaks into oblivion
    never finding what I seek
    what I need
    what I feel

    oh my heart!
    oh my tears!
    oh my soul!

    where do I belong
    with
    this heart felt being
    beside me
    touching me
    devouring me

    All I can do is tear ní tare, tear ní tare
    to rip out all of me so i can be with
    you
    tear ní tare ,tear ní tare ní cry

    cry
    cry
    cry the flashfloods out of my heart

    till that abyss is empty of you
    empty of all that sadness and despair
    and all of that stuff that is missing you

    Oh my heart!

    moving away all that was there
    to make room for another day

    Oh my tears!

    to make room for more tears ní tare
    more distance, hate and touch

    Oh my soul!

    is
    Just
    to be fulfilled once more





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      i came to read again... it is really powerful and pulls out the heart... loved it, loved it!
    | Posted on 2009-11-07 00:00:00 | by sombreanddim | [ Reply to This ]
      I love this poem because i feel the same emotions... i can feel the pain that is hurting you. It is universal and the poem is powerful in the depiction of reality. Why we can't help loving the people who will never return to us... Is this folly or sincerity... i stand by the latter.

    Great!!!!!!!!!!!!1
    | Posted on 2009-11-05 00:00:00 | by sombreanddim | [ Reply to This ]


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