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    dots Submission Name: war of the heartdots
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    Author: Elementlove
    ASL Info:    17/girl/OR
    Elite Ratio:    1.85 - 2/1/2
    Words: 441
    Class/Type: Random Thoughts/Alone
    Total Views: 29
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 2055



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    dotswar of the heartdots
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    i sit and wounder what can i do for my heart that wount hurt others.
    how can i make a disishone that wount hurt me what am i to do to make my heart happy.
    what did i do to deserv loosing one's that i love.
    how do i choos be tween a war of my heart pulling in so miny dierecshons......
    do i sit and wate to see what happens or do i jump and see were i land ...
    theres one.two.three my heart diziers, ..
    one i cant love them cuz they wont let me cuz they say my heart is not fully theres win at the time it was.. two i cant give my heart to cuz his be longs to another ... the
    next and last i can love but in the prosaes my friend will be disapointed and not like him.....
    the good things in the people.....
    one has a sweet heart and is so kinda and giving but they win i with them gives so much love and to more then just me a sweet little baby witch i love so and hold so dear.......
    the next did not choos me but i fell for them head i will allways love him thow his heart be longs to another he will all ways be my friend till the end....
    and last a boy who is lost and needs a way out out of a life so head so mean and tuff he don't think be for he speeks and just gets him self in trubel but he
    asks me over and over "plz stay kitten im nothign with out you" he takes it and brakes it and my friends hate it, hate him ... so do i go with one with the baby so sweet ...
    to dream of the one ill never probly get or meet....
    or three the boy who holds me so dear but says all the wrong things and dus not know it......
    so i sit here and wounder am i even met to be happy ...
    or am i ment to sit here in the darkenss that sarounds me and the infedent cold that wount let me be...
    i colse my eyes and see death i am deprest and that wount change i gust say ...
    plz plz oh plz help me one of you three just love me and death let me be.....

    BY: Danielle .L. Thornton




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