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    dots Submission Name: Incredible (Robbie's Song)dots
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    Author: Iffy
    Elite Ratio:    6.33 - 91/55/41
    Words: 374
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Misc
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    dotsIncredible (Robbie's Song)dots
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    You walk away
    The daylight breaks and light surrounds you
    Till I can’t find you
    You always say
    That everyone’s talking about you
    They always doubt you

    You make mistakes
    You sit and think about the future
    How much you miss her
    Why does it take?
    You so long to see that you don’t need her
    That I’ve waited so long for you to leave her
    That I would never be her

    And I would never let you fall…
    Because you’re unbelievable

    Chorus:
    I won’t let you put yourself down anymore
    I won’t let you hide behind closed doors
    It’s time that you realise you can go far
    It’s time you see, how incredible you are

    She always complains
    That you’re a pain and that she hates you
    But then she kisses you and wants you to kiss her too
    Then she leaves you
    She doesn’t need you
    She doesn’t know you like I do
    I just want what’s best for you

    Chorus:
    I won’t let you put yourself down anymore
    I won’t let you hide behind closed doors
    It’s time that you realise you can go far
    It’s time you see, how incredible you are

    I honestly don’t believe that you’re as bad as you say
    What good is it if all you do is throw your talent away?
    I wish you’d see what lies behind her eyes
    And then you’d realise…

    It’s been a while
    Since you’ve smiled because you wanted to
    Not because someone’s making you
    I miss the fun and games
    It’s just not the same anymore
    But I know you’re worth fighting for

    Chorus:
    I won’t let you put yourself down anymore
    I won’t let you hide behind closed doors
    It’s time that you realise you can go far
    It’s time you see, how incredible you are
    Why does it take?
    You so long to see that you don’t need her
    I will never be her
    And I would never let you fall
    Because you’re unbelievable
    You’re incredible
    I won’t let you put yourself down anymore
    I won’t let you hide behind closed doors
    It’s time that you realise you can go far
    It’s time you see, how incredible you are




    Submitted on 2009-11-05 03:53:20     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Firstly, whoaaah. "I won’t let you put yourself down anymore/I won’t let you hide behind closed doors." Better than the crap we have on the radio over here, in my humble opinion. No "you are my life, when you hurt, I hurt, so top hurting meeeee!" even if you're thinking it. Second, you come out pretty strong in this piece, and the reader gets the feeling that they know EXACTLY where you stand. Now, I'm a fiend for imagery and there's not that much here, which bugs the [censored] out of me, but it's a damn sight better than songs I've heard recently. You should write lyrics for a living xD

    Slainte,

    DW
    | Posted on 2009-11-06 00:00:00 | by Shadowstar13 | [ Reply to This ]



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