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    dots Submission Name: pretty much the samedots
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    Author: isabella
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    dotspretty much the samedots
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    even comes on odd days. bends around curves and can hold
    a tune. it hugs a road. becomes mist. hangs in the smoke of God
    and on drooping leaves the color of pumpkins. my world goes green. brown. orange. then lays ontop of a mantis, who prays
    in afternoon sun.







    Submitted on 2009-11-05 04:58:54     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      a bleakness rectifying itself? I imagine this mood drifting drown and down, and then something, this 'even' sitting on the end of of it like a seesaw and pulling it slowly back up to 'just about ok'. I imagine lots of things.

    even bending, becoming mists, mists hugging roads.

    mists hugging roads (beautiful, by the way, and so eloquently put).

    the world righting itself.

    the seasons moving on (we ought to follow them out of our ruts).

    this vapourous, firm, soothing solidity, gentle solidity of our mind-worlds.

    these worlds balancing on insects (I love insects), a prayer of sorts.

    softness.

    (I love this)
    | Posted on 2009-11-08 00:00:00 | by AlyRose | [ Reply to This ]
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    | Posted on 2009-11-05 00:00:00 | by slingerofink | [ Reply to This ]


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