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    dots Submission Name: Fade Into Youdots
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    Author: cuddledumplin
    ASL Info:    36/ f/UK
    Elite Ratio:    4.08 - 6269/5927/526
    Words: 43
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsFade Into Youdots
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    Our bodies are a blur
    I can no longer tell
    wWhere I end or you begin.
    It seems we've become
    what I thought
    our love should look like:
    a beautiful mist
    that fades into another
    in a moonlit room.






    Submitted on 2004-02-12 02:15:20     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      mmm... very soothing. Very... comfortable. I've said it before, I'll say it again... old theme + new eyes = great poetry! Well done! <><
    | Posted on 2004-03-22 00:00:00 | by WorththeWait | [ Reply to This ]
      a re re re sounding notion that love is far far far below it's means. i would even go as far to say, and i would say "i do not love you because what i feel is greater"

    that is what this says to me..
    bodies blurring, moonlit mist...although the satisfaction you feel would worry me. if i were ever satisfied it would have to be a mutual reaching of satisfaction....both or none.

    love the little-ness lately with the big picture taking view.

    ghost.
    | Posted on 2004-02-12 00:00:00 | by myghostsliketotravel | [ Reply to This ]
      i donno about really being overused topic, but u seem to be able to take an idea and get straight to the point with it. while still keeping in mind the intrest of the reader! excellent job!.. look forward to reading more!
    | Posted on 2004-02-12 00:00:00 | by drkpoet | [ Reply to This ]
      I agree with fairchild, what about bodies and souls mixing, melting, trying to find off-the beaten-path images? all in all though a concise beautiful sentiment.
    | Posted on 2004-02-12 00:00:00 | by mightylt | [ Reply to This ]


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