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    dots Submission Name: The Crash Sitedots
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    Author: Survivor_Dean
    ASL Info:    42/M/Minnesota
    Elite Ratio:    2.02 - 165/186/124
    Words: 227
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
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    dotsThe Crash Sitedots
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    Today I actually stopped at the place where I had crashed my bike
    I didn't know what to expect, but I know what I didn't like
    The overpowering feeling, which swept right over me then
    As I sat and thought about, the way things might have been
    What if I had died right there would you be better off?
    Think about that one really hard before you mentally scoff
    As I sat there I thought, I wouldn't have all of this sorrow
    I wouldnít have to worry about whatís happening tomorrow
    If I had died out on the road, would you then be glad
    Or because you couldn't hurt me, would it make you mad?
    I cried when I stopped there, sorry to still be around
    Most of the time right now, I wanted six feet under the ground
    If I had died right there, would you have said anything?
    Or would you walk up to my casket, and throw in your wedding ring?
    If thatís not how you would have felt, why then did you do it?
    I may not be dead in a casket, but still the ring you threw it,
    I really think itís pathetic and sick, when you make someone feel so bad
    When they look at a scene where they could have died, and their only wish is that they had.




    Submitted on 2009-11-05 18:53:21     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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