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    dots Submission Name: Give Me a Breakdots
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    Author: Survivor_Dean
    ASL Info:    42/M/Minnesota
    Elite Ratio:    2.02 - 165/186/124
    Words: 572
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsGive Me a Breakdots
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    The last few months of my life, have really been the pits
    I try my best to get ahead, but everything just quits
    I wish I knew just what to do, to make it all work out
    Nothing I can figure out, so I scream and shout

    I shout out, ďGIVE ME A BREAK LET ME GET AHEADĒ
    But from the looks of things, I might as well be dead
    The only break IĎve gotten this year, was in my collarbone
    Then my wife took off on me, and left me all alone

    Nothing seems to go my way, I must be really bad
    Nobody deserves a life like this, it will drive you mad
    Nothing that I say or do, is ever fucking right
    Then I sit and wonder, why I donít sleep at night

    Iím afraid to close my eyes, afraid of what I will see
    Because my life sucks really bad, and that is meant to be
    I finally thought this is it, things can only get better
    That was when I got more bad news, I didnít get the letter

    The one where they took my license, because I owed some money
    The cops pulled me over, took my truck, it wasnít very funny
    It took all the money that I had, to get it out of the lot
    And in all reality, the truck isnít even worth squat

    They put a plate on my collarbone, to make it heal up right
    Too bad the screws that they put in, didnít screw in very tight
    So they had to cut me open again, and try to fix the plate
    And still no one can understand, why Iím so irate

    They say hey donít feel so bad, it could always be worse
    I say the only way it would be better is in the back of a hearse
    My life is pathetic, and sucks shit worse than ever before
    Then I get a reality check, my wife is really a whore

    Then to make things worse, and top it off a bit
    She tells for a long time, I havenít been worth shit
    People tell me I should move on, and get on with my life
    But thatís not so easy to do, when itís filled with strife

    I wish that my life would end, and theyíd put me in the ground
    Then I wouldnít curse everyone, that I am around
    But I wonít get out of this that easy, no it has to be tough
    When I try to do anything, they always make it rough

    Itís been almost one year now, since I started to fall
    No one has stood by me, right through it all
    I have been so all alone, and I canít slow it down
    I would jump off the bridge, I probably wouldnít drown

    That would be just my luck, to jump off and survive
    Then I could truly be, the unluckiest man alive
    That my life can be this bad, it really is a shame
    Because no matter what I do, I canít win this game

    Two steps forward and three steps back, used to be a joke
    Not to me anymore, my lifeís gone up in smoke
    If it doesnít get any better, I canít go on living
    If it stays the way it is, I wonít see Thanksgiving




    Submitted on 2009-11-05 18:56:00     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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