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    dots Submission Name: Tomorrowdots
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    Author: Survivor_Dean
    ASL Info:    42/M/Minnesota
    Elite Ratio:    2.02 - 165/186/124
    Words: 309
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsTomorrowdots
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    It seems to me Iíll never win
    I wonder if I should just give in
    Give in to the urges from deep inside
    Or maybe I should just run and hide

    I canít give in and I canít hide away
    But I know for sure here I canít stay
    Where I am now is Hell on earth
    Was this the real reason for my birth?

    For some reason I was expecting more
    Than watching my life walk out that door
    But out it went, itís gone forever
    I want it back but you say never

    Iíll never forget what you have done
    Especially saying that I was the one
    When it was you screwing around
    And running our marriage into the ground

    All the while I stayed true
    And I believed the same for you
    But you decided you wanted more
    So you turned yourself into a whore

    Those are your words from the past
    When you said that we would last
    Who knew that you would lie and cheat?
    Itís not really such an amazing feat

    People that do that lose in the end
    Leaving behind wounds to tend
    The wounds you leave are deep and wide
    No one sees them they are on the inside

    I wish that they had a pill to make feelings go away
    But alas they donít so I guess theyíll stay
    Like a knife they cut deep into my soul
    Whether they stay or go I have no control

    I try to move on get on with my life
    Iím tired of all the misery and strife
    One way or another this has to end
    Maybe the solution lies around the bend

    So Iíll hang on at least for another day
    Maybe tomorrow will be different and I will want to stay




    Submitted on 2009-11-05 18:57:49     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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