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    dots Submission Name: My New Ladydots
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    Author: Survivor_Dean
    ASL Info:    42/M/Minnesota
    Elite Ratio:    2.02 - 165/186/124
    Words: 572
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 724
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 3122



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    dotsMy New Ladydots
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    Today I finally met someone, who made me feel alive
    She had the kind of beauty, for which most women strive
    She was pretty through and through, right down to the bone
    When she walked into the room, she really set the tone
    All the eyes would turn to see, who was that lovely lady?
    Surprised a lady that looked like that, would be seen with me

    She saw right through my rough outside, and saw the good within
    When she started talking to me, my heart she did win
    She and I would sit and talk, all through the night
    Then I would head for home, before it got too light
    We talked and talked for nights on end about one thing or another
    She listened to everything I said, and didnít try to smother

    We talked about the ways; we had been hurt in the past
    And swore to each other, this would be the last
    I wouldnít ever hurt her, nor would she hurt me
    Thatís the way itís supposed to go, the way itís meant to be
    We were in no hurry, to jump right into bed
    We had to take our time, so our feelings said

    So we kept on talking, our feelings we did share
    When I told her how I felt, all she did was stare
    I asked her quick, was something wrong, in the words I said
    She said no, sheís had the same things, reeling round her head
    That was when I first kissed her, and the sparks sure did fly
    They were even brighter, than the stars up in the sky

    I knew right then she was the one, I needed in my life
    But I couldnít bring myself, to ask her to be my wife
    I had already been down that road, at least a time or two
    And all I ever got for it, was months of feeling blue
    So we just decided, we wouldnít tie the knot
    We would live together, no matter what others thought

    That was when we went to bed, it was our first tryst
    It was even more magical, than the time when first we kissed
    We had so many feelings, left to be discovered
    Even though a lot of them, had already been covered
    That was many years ago, which brings me to today
    Every night when I go to bed, on my knees I pray

    I thank the Lord, for the heaven on earth, that I have with her
    Even now, when I look at her, the feelings still do stir
    For she is still my lady, and I am still her man
    Just like itís supposed to be, part of the master plan
    I look deep into her eyes, and only love I see
    For she is the only lady, that sees the real me

    I will love her with all my heart, till my final day
    I will never leave her alone, with her Iíll always stay
    For she truly understands, my feelings kept inside
    I will never abandon her, and she will never hide
    We will stay together, right up till the end
    We will try to do our best, to have no hurts to mend

    That is the way it is with love, and how itís supposed to stay
    True love never really dies, and you never have to pay




    Submitted on 2009-11-05 19:02:18     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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