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    dots Submission Name: walls that held my homedots

    Author: mandy dupuis
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    dotswalls that held my homedots

    When I was a kid I wished I was beautiful,
    I seeked for attention from any old soul.
    In the dark I would talk to the voices in my head,
    I would pretend that someday a new day would begin.
    My simplicity is the old willow tree,
    together we weep until eventually I feel free
    and I fall asleep.

    Now don't think I had to stay inside,
    It was my mind that was caged.
    I was hidden from the rage
    Loneliness filled my head with thoughts.
    Sometimes I just wish I could drop.
    I swallowed the quarters but they didn't stick.
    I followed the line, but I could not jump the bridge.

    I was blanketed with lies, and my emotions where inside.
    Leaving me alone, angry.
    I was the ghost in my frustrations
    My eyes are in my dreams, and my ears they are the reasons I remember
    I remember their disease, Alcohol. Anger was the passion of the home
    the home that held my walls.

    Submitted on 2009-11-05 20:18:27     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I feel for you because how I understould it, It is like you keep your emotions in side and you tried to exscpe but couldn't. I like the whole poem it is beautiful. Hope to see more like this because I really loved it.
    | Posted on 2009-11-06 00:00:00 | by Katsi039tsahente | [ Reply to This ]

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