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    dots Submission Name: Dancing Under Starsdots
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    Author: KindredSpirit
    ASL Info:    20, Male, Burlington Iowa
    Elite Ratio:    2.37 - 46/71/89
    Words: 89
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 34
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 661



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    dotsDancing Under Starsdots
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    Again we lay here,
    Amongst the resting dead.
    We warm up to each other,
    Head to head.
    Together we feast
    On a single loaf of bread.

    To you my lady,
    I propose a toast!
    Of the finest champaigne,
    Together for eternity we'll boast.
    And together in smooth motion,
    We'll dance under the stars as our host.

    Reach into the sky
    And relight the stars.
    Forever is short,
    But eternity is ours.
    We'll stay here...
    Miles from any noisey cars.
    Dancing together dramatically,
    Underneath the observing stars.




    Submitted on 2009-11-06 14:12:11     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      wow...that's basically all i could say for this poem...that's actually really good...its though it seems you were writing it to me because...this may sound a little weird but i had a dream about 2 weeks ago that me and you were dancing under the moon and it's just weird that you would write a poem about dancing under the stars! isn't that cool!
    | Posted on 2009-11-09 00:00:00 | by gothgirl101 | [ Reply to This ]


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