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    Author: Runes
    Elite Ratio:    5.81 - 264/221/100
    Words: 113
    Class/Type: Poetry/Comedy
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    I don't want a man to sing to me;
    I'd rather have a bird.
    I don't want a man who writes all day;
    I'll only read a third.
    I don't want a man who cares a lot;
    I'm a girl who never calls.
    If I could do repairs myself,
    I wouldn't need a man at all.

    I don't want a man who talks a lot;
    I won't have much to add.
    I don't want a man who has a kid;
    that always turns out bad.
    I don't want a man who loves me back
    if he didn't love me first...
    I really have no need for men
    except to hold my purse.




    Submitted on 2009-11-06 18:30:41     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      hahahaha....so you're responsible for all of those boobs waiting outside of the woman's john in the shopping malls. There they stand, embarassed, sweating, eyes darting back and forth rapidly, ready to yell '[censored] off' to the first person that snickers at him....all so he can suck on some girls toes on the weekends.

    Men aren't so bad. But the chatty, caring, loving, singer/writer types with kids sure are. Me? I just expect a woman to shave her privates and hold her own damn purse...and i'll fix her whole [censored] house for her....or at least hire someone to do it.


    MyX
    | Posted on 2009-11-09 00:00:00 | by MyX | [ Reply to This ]
      "End result: All that a woman wants is money...nothing else."

    That's right, you're all a bunch of money-grubbing whores -- because stereotyping a whole gender is the most awesomely intelligent thing to say...


    That aside, what the hell do you want then?? I will say that a lot of you ladies are a damn fickle bunch...

    I hold no one's purse.
    Actually, I lie... my mama trained me up far too good to be able to shake off those outdated, gentlemanly ways...

    | Posted on 2009-11-07 00:00:00 | by trinityfinger | [ Reply to This ]
      hmmm *looks below and giggles* someone has superior stuffed up they're arse

    I don't have much to say on this one except I think that there are Useless men & women all around us at any given moment they can creep up and wipe they're incoherent stupidity all over us...EEWWWWW

    but I can say that I don't think I've ever read anything from you that feels FORCED hahaha so bullocks to all that!!!

    so yea

    my two cents...which it's worth much
    | Posted on 2009-11-07 00:00:00 | by clay | [ Reply to This ]
      Commentary type requested: Unspecified

    1. As a poem having completely forced rhyme.
    2. It is too plain and simple so there is nothing much to comment about.

    End result: All that a woman wants is money...nothing else.
    | Posted on 2009-11-07 00:00:00 | by keestu | [ Reply to This ]
      "If I could do repairs myself,/I wouldn't need a man at all..." Haha. I'm guessing you're playing at the misogynistic themes in here, mainly because that seems not at all like your normal vibe. Could do with a lengthening, I think, but it's a very quirky and interesting piece and I chuckled aloud.

    Slainte,

    DW
    | Posted on 2009-11-06 00:00:00 | by Shadowstar13 | [ Reply to This ]


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