To The Boy With The Webcam by Runes

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Submission Name: To The Boy With The Webcam dots

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Author:	Runes
Elite Ratio:	5.81 - 264/221/100
Words:	55

Class/Type:	Poetry/Comedy
Total Views:	54
Average Vote:	No vote yet.
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To The Boy With The Webcam dots

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Picture! Picture! Send me pictures!
Let me see the real you...
Body! Body! Show me body!
Goddamn girl, this can't be true...
Cam me! Cam me! Dont'cha scam me,
Oh hell yeah, baby, you're so hot!

All that fuss you raised to see me...
Pity that you're not.

Submitted on 2009-11-06 18:42:13 Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  I like this even more because of the fact that it shows your versatility without completely undoing your identity as a writer (at least, not from my perspective.) With this, there is a fair measure of wit complimenting the exclamation point length of the piece.

From what I've noticed, you always write in such a way that there is a wisecracking persona that never seems to get lost - a smart ass that always has something funny to say. It's just that in this particular scenario, you were given a chance to forgo the sympathetic undertone to give a good slap on a cheek that deserves to get slapped.

That being said, I like your control. I like the truth in your voice.
| Posted on 2009-11-14 00:00:00 | by ANGELO | [ Reply to This ]
  Have to hand it to you, this write is very REAL. And very funny. But why should a guy have to be hot to want to see some young pussy? The reason they prey on women from home is BECAUSE they are heinously ugly. The joke is on the girls shaking their rump before webcams everywhere. Just Go to YouTube and write in 'shaking phat booty' into the search bar. I do all the time .

MyX

| Posted on 2009-11-09 00:00:00 | by MyX | [ Reply to This ]
  ha ha, wow that was funny. ahh you are too good with clever. it is like your clay. i wonder the response if you sent this to someone, or i wonder if you did. that would be priceless. i always like these quick little ones. the rhyme is always so...... reminiscent but it works. coolness
| Posted on 2009-11-06 00:00:00 | by cornonthekob | [ Reply to This ]

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