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    dots Submission Name: Thiefdots
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    Author: MinervaBlu
    ASL Info:    18 where I need to be
    Elite Ratio:    3.5 - 291/305/233
    Words: 121
    Class/Type: Poetry/Trapped
    Total Views: 55
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 779



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    dotsThiefdots
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    We loved like no other
    But before me there was another
    She threatened blackened doves
    Like no other, we loved.

    She came like a wronged queen
    Threw turmoil in our world serene
    She pointed fingers and gave blame
    Like a wronged queen, she came.

    Her eyes blazed like fire
    Hot, blue Safire
    By her angry beauty I was amazed
    Like fire, her eyes blazed.

    Tears fell and dripped off her chin
    I could see her heart breaking within
    With hatred her chest did swell
    Dripping off her chin, tears fell

    I had stolen her love, like a thief
    Causing this woman utter grief
    The worst thing I can think of
    Like a thief, I stole her love




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