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The Reason


Author: faideddarkness
ASL Info:    28 - Male - Idaho
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Words: 336
Class/Type: Lyrics /Depressed
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A heart is treacherous bred only to believe. Emotions aster when it awakes like leaves when then wind passes by. This is about a heart that was drug out of its hole that it lived in miserably and then just left for nothing.


The Reason



I opened my eyes when I herd your voice
I've never felt alive
I could see the colors of the world
You brought me to life
I could feel you breathing into me
When I walk into this light
I could do anything cause of you
Nothing I couldn't fight

Can it be I've always been dead?
A life so dark there's nothing said
Standing behind the mirror tonight
Watching this life fall out of sight
Was there a purpose for me to live?
A motive to have a heart to give
Vacant is this heart feeling so foul
Deserted like a desert lays my soul

You came to me
Clouds all around
Can you feel it pumping?
In your hands bleeding
I gave it to you
This life was for you
Now you leave me
Thunder surrounds
I can feel the lightning
As you're striking me down
This life all for you
I only lived for you

Now as my mind starts to part
No longer can I bear this heart
No reflection after my last glance
You've deprived me of my last chance
So I venture to the edge of death
For in this life I've nothing left
If you think this wound will ever heal
I won't live if it was my heart you steal

I know you're out there watching me
Is this how we were meant to be?
You tore down my walls to let me out
Then abounded me to roam about
The faces on the wall are staring
At this monster that's now bleeding
You've pried open my chest
Closing my eyes never letting me rest

You came to me
Clouds all around
Can you feel it pumping?
In your hands bleeding
I gave it to you
This life was for you
Now you leave me
Thunder surrounds
I can feel the lightning
As you're striking me down
This life all for you
I only lived for you




Submitted on 2009-11-06 22:10:08     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  The sadness in this piece has me in tears. It's beautiful nonetheless. This is a very strong piece and the range of emotions that it goes through is amazing. I often times wish I didn't have a heart to feel...but only because I know the pain of love and wanting to do anything for the one I love no matter how much it hurt me. The heart can be a treacherous thing.


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| Posted on 2009-11-12 00:00:00 | by takenspiritwind | [ Reply to This ]
  Painful like truth! You see, i also want to die for someone, so i can be with him all the time and enter in his dreams and protect and shield him from evil and love him... but God is watchimg somewhere and if you have faith, miracles do happen and love is at the core of all miracles. I know it doesn't review the poem but i am only a messenger of hope who believes in delaying the end till one's real life task is accomplished.

I am sorry for my crude and unrefined comment but it was honest.
| Posted on 2009-11-07 00:00:00 | by sombreanddim | [ Reply to This ]


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