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    dots Submission Name: The Reasondots
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    Author: faideddarkness
    ASL Info:    28 - Male - Idaho
    Elite Ratio:    6.47 - 99/55/49
    Words: 365
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Depressed
    Total Views: 673
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    Bytes: 2204



    Description:
       A heart is treacherous bred only to believe. Emotions aster when it awakes like leaves when then wind passes by. This is about a heart that was drug out of its hole that it lived in miserably and then just left for nothing.


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    dotsThe Reasondots
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    I opened my eyes when I herd you voice
    Iíve never felt alive
    I could see the colors of the world
    You brought me to life
    I could feel you breathing into me
    When I walk into this light
    I could do anything cause of you
    Nothing I couldnít fight

    Can it be Iíve always been dead?
    A life so dark thereís nothing said
    Standing behind the mirror tonight
    Watching this life fall out of sight
    Was there a purpose for me to live?
    A motive to have a heart to give
    Vacant is this heart feeling so foul
    Deserted like a desert lays my soul

    You came to me
    Clouds all around
    Can you feel it pumping?
    In your hands bleeding
    I gave it to you
    This life was for you
    Now you leave me
    Thunder surrounds
    I can feel the lightning
    As youíre striking me down
    This life all for you
    I only lived for you

    Now as my mind starts to part
    No longer can I bear this heart
    No reflection after my last glance
    Youíve deprived me of my last chance
    So I venture to the edge of death
    For in this life Iíve nothing left
    If you think this wound will ever heal
    I wonít live if itís my heart you steal

    You came to me
    Clouds all around
    Now you leave me
    Thunder surrounds
    This life all for you
    I only lived for you

    I know youíre out there watching me
    Is this how we were meant to be?
    You tore down my walls to let me out
    Then abounded me to roam about
    The faces on the wall are staring
    At this monster thatís now bleeding
    Dyeing to pry open my chest
    Just close my eyes and let me rest

    You came to me
    Clouds all around
    Can you feel it pumping?
    In your hands bleeding
    I gave it to you
    This life was for you
    Now you leave me
    Thunder surrounds
    I can feel the lightning
    As youíre striking me down
    This life all for you
    I only lived for you

    I lived for you




    Submitted on 2009-11-06 22:10:08     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      The sadness in this piece has me in tears. It's beautiful nonetheless. This is a very strong piece and the range of emotions that it goes through is amazing. I often times wish I didn't have a heart to feel...but only because I know the pain of love and wanting to do anything for the one I love no matter how much it hurt me. The heart can be a treacherous thing.


    Krys
    | Posted on 2009-11-12 00:00:00 | by takenspiritwind | [ Reply to This ]
      Painful like truth! You see, i also want to die for someone, so i can be with him all the time and enter in his dreams and protect and shield him from evil and love him... but God is watchimg somewhere and if you have faith, miracles do happen and love is at the core of all miracles. I know it doesn't review the poem but i am only a messenger of hope who believes in delaying the end till one's real life task is accomplished.

    I am sorry for my crude and unrefined comment but it was honest.
    | Posted on 2009-11-07 00:00:00 | by sombreanddim | [ Reply to This ]


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