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    dots Submission Name: Storytime dots
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    Author: Runes
    Elite Ratio:    5.81 - 264/221/100
    Words: 111
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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       I will never write you down.


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    dotsStorytime dots
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    This is a story about a girl who isn't me, isn't alive, isn't anything but this thing that was sleeping, this little shell of a thing that kept pushing breath in and out of its lungs and moving despite being dead.

    This is a story about this window in time, and these two men who crawled through it, and what one told the other about the thing on the bed.

    This is a story that can't tell the story, only a few scattered words that spilled, things like "Watch this..."

    This is a story about a non-story; it's only a story. That's all it is.




    Submitted on 2009-11-07 00:17:25     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      i love this. thats all.
    | Posted on 2009-11-07 00:00:00 | by Theophilus | [ Reply to This ]
      Ok this is quite a scary part here or maybe it is not, feels like im stuck in a lsd trip trying to find answers and searching with mounting horror, or maybe not, maybe all is well and there is no fear here. Still...
    | Posted on 2009-11-07 00:00:00 | by Clayman | [ Reply to This ]


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