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    dots Submission Name: Preserve the Fruitdots
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    Author: lynn marsters
    ASL Info:    20/f/canada
    Elite Ratio:    3.41 - 49/61/32
    Words: 81
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    Eastern with ease, an alternate reflection, many many -she said- many many many, Excrement of Endive, my excesses secrete,
    I have no money, I didn't think I should,
    Can me some Jam, preserve the fruit,
    Bleed my with leeches, Effort is useless, nothing remains, Locked in this excrement, hurt me, trap me, Keep it in, let it breed, create the sound, then make me deaf,
    Age out of the crowd,
    ESCAPE,
    the soft leather dream




    Submitted on 2009-11-08 13:55:47     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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