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    dots Submission Name: Is it the last time?dots
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    Author: Katsi039tsahente
    Elite Ratio:    1.7 - 4/17/25
    Words: 151
    Class/Type: Random Thoughts/Longing
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    dotsIs it the last time?dots
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    Yet again I meet you.
    Only in my drakest time.
    Is when I see you.

    When I need you.
    Is when there is no one there,
    But you still come.
    Even if you know that your my last hope.

    So now that I need you the most.
    I ask if.
    "you will you come through for me again?"
    I wait for you to answer.

    Two hour go by and you finally answer.
    Now I stand before the mirror.
    Take the blade and slit.
    The pain away and wait for you to be seen.
    In my eyes that seen to much,
    I stands before the mirror.


    As the blood drips down my arms,
    I can feel you just within my grasps
    So just as I'm about to give up hope
    There you are seen.
    As I fall in love again.






    Submitted on 2009-11-08 14:07:12     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Damn, that was pretty dark. The message was conveyed well.
    | Posted on 2009-11-09 00:00:00 | by Cayman | [ Reply to This ]


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