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    dots Submission Name: Grace of the Dark Onedots
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    Author: Xiallia
    ASL Info:    17-F-Missing Osaka[IL]
    Elite Ratio:    1.49 - 3/23/32
    Words: 144
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 555
    Average Vote:    4.5000
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    dotsGrace of the Dark Onedots
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    A lost little child wandering alone
    Was looking for a place to call her home.
    One person first took her in.

    But soon she faded once again,
    Running around lost and scared
    She fell into a dark abyss
    The Darkness eating away at
    flesh and bone the lost little child was soon no more

    The second of last was when it began
    A cold dark hand
    thrusting life into her again.

    Bleeding and Broken she laid in his arms...
    the lost little girl has now a home.
    And to this day she grew to know..
    A Father that cared but always cold.

    My Father I love you...no one can change
    A feeling I had since the day I first laid
    In your arms embracing your touch
    With you is where I belong...
    and No-where else....

    ~S.X.C.F




    Submitted on 2009-11-08 15:42:54     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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