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    dots Submission Name: A Moments Thoughtdots

    Author: sandman
    Elite Ratio:    3.22 - 1644/1440/613
    Words: 252
    Class/Type: Misc/Dark
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    dotsA Moments Thoughtdots

    Today, I find myself
    In the afternoon Im passing
    Alone with my thoughts
    of today yesterday and tomorrow

    I think Iím still feeling
    Confused & lost
    In this momentum the silence
    Forms my ludicy

    While deep into the mist of my thoughts
    I found a burning ember
    inside my soul

    It seems that my hands don't posess a face
    But my face can see inside you
    I take your worst offering
    and leave you in fear

    No fears of yesterday as today
    I still here you talking
    but tomorrow no sun may rise

    deep in my woods you go
    as my spirit takes us across the page
    and a long journey awaits

    to the poet you are the puppet dancing
    on a dim lit stage without music
    somewhere in the darkest corner
    of the stage a dimented soul
    cries out and waits to caress your dimise

    it could be you dancing on that stage
    or walking from the waters of deciet
    in a moments thought
    Iíve turned the page leaving you wandering
    what happened to them

    for the poets face rest with them
    for each and everyday that passes
    is another day of that voice, that
    sets you onward to leave your peace
    at the hands of your souls confidant

    even though every story
    should have an ending
    some may say it worked out
    better that way in the end

    Submitted on 2009-11-09 14:25:46     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      this poem is beautiful.
    | Posted on 2009-11-10 00:00:00 | by DaGrimReaperess | [ Reply to This ]
      Seems something troubles you, friend. But then again, aren't we all troubled? The problems in life give us something to write about. Very good job.
    | Posted on 2009-11-09 00:00:00 | by LeviX | [ Reply to This ]

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