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    dots Submission Name: Just another Love Poemdots

    Author: bloddyrazorgirl
    ASL Info:    18/f/az
    Elite Ratio:    1.14 - 41/35/40
    Words: 94
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 409
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       i wrote this about my boyfriend...it sucks i know....but i had to write it

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    dotsJust another Love Poemdots

    here i go
    I'll tell you what to do
    grab my hand
    and pull me close to you
    wrap your arms around me
    hold me tight
    dance with me in the moonlight
    this golf course our stage
    look deep into my hazel eyes
    tell me you love me
    that you will never let me go
    feel the electricity
    run through your veins
    as you kiss me on the lips
    oh so passionatly
    let this november night slip away
    and i promise you will be okay
    forever we will always be
    sami and stephen

    Submitted on 2009-11-09 14:35:04     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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