Say What?

Author: Cayman ASL Info:    31 Elite Ratio:    2.77 - 182 /168 /72 Words: 104

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Say What?

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Slap me in the face, what just happened? Mind caught blindsided by emotions Are you kidding me? hee hee Nope I’m not kidding, playing or boasting I’m just saying how I feel Keeping it real and letting you know it’s on like Donkey Kong You feel for me and I feel for you It feels so good to miss you Fact of the matter is, I’ve never yearned for anyone like I do for you Just makes the moment even more special So tell me that you miss me We’ll just miss each other till we kiss each other

Submitted on 2009-11-09 16:04:29     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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This is a very- playfull piece. I think everything goes together alright although the first stanza set sounds alittle off with the ideas of the rest of it.

| Posted on 2009-11-12 00:00:00 | by isis_lenore | [ Reply to This ]

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