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    dots Submission Name: Say What?dots
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    Author: Cayman
    ASL Info:    31
    Elite Ratio:    2.77 - 182/168/72
    Words: 104
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 410
    Average Vote:    4.0000
    Bytes: 598



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    dotsSay What?dots
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    Slap me in the face, what just happened?
    Mind caught blindsided by emotions
    Are you kidding me? hee hee

    Nope Iím not kidding, playing or boasting
    Iím just saying how I feel
    Keeping it real and letting you know itís on like Donkey Kong

    You feel for me and I feel for you
    It feels so good to miss you
    Fact of the matter is, Iíve never yearned for anyone like I do for you

    Just makes the moment even more special
    So tell me that you miss me
    Weíll just miss each other till we kiss each other




    Submitted on 2009-11-09 16:04:29     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      This is a very- playfull piece. I think everything goes together alright although the first stanza set sounds alittle off with the ideas of the rest of it.
    | Posted on 2009-11-12 00:00:00 | by isis_lenore | [ Reply to This ]


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