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"out on rails"

Author: Jimi James
ASL Info:    24/m/somehwere
Elite Ratio:    6.16 - 90 /78 /41
Words: 55
Class/Type: Poetry /Longing
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you can't move freely.thats why.
"out on rails".

"out on rails"

In a subwaystation
my heart is racin',
away the trains paint
meadowland so faint,

flesh does burden
"no well at all";
a call of the hide
harsh, but right.

wall to come.
yet "no" is to go
dear god

a bird
melodies so blur

"elation o elation"

Submitted on 2009-11-09 20:48:53     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  The soul will seek its freedom. Let it ring, clear as this Poem! Thanks for sharing.
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