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    dots Submission Name: "out on rails"dots
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    Author: Jimi James
    ASL Info:    24/m/somehwere
    Elite Ratio:    6.16 - 90/78/41
    Words: 55
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
    Total Views: 743
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 436



    Description:
       you can't move freely.thats why.
    "out on rails".


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    dots"out on rails"dots
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    In a subwaystation
    my heart is racin',
    away the trains paint
    meadowland so faint,
    faint-hearted.

    flesh does burden
    "no well at all";
    a call of the hide
    harsh, but right.

    wall to come.
    yet "no" is to go
    dear god

    a bird
    melodies so blur

    "elation o elation"





    Submitted on 2009-11-09 20:48:53     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      The soul will seek its freedom. Let it ring, clear as this Poem! Thanks for sharing.
    | Posted on 2013-01-15 00:00:00 | by CrypticBard | [ Reply to This ]


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