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    dots Submission Name: We wage war on unsuspecting heartsdots

    Author: silentpoison
    ASL Info:    22/F/Teh Shire
    Elite Ratio:    2.67 - 204/259/118
    Words: 134
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsWe wage war on unsuspecting heartsdots

    Where do i go from here?
    When all this is over
    and the civil war done
    we pull back from fireign land
    with no profit won
    no further knowledge of ourselves
    and only the mine fields left
    after all the soldiers are packed
    in crates
    the field will lie
    How to sleep
    without the bombs whistle
    guns blast
    and cries of agony from
    the innermost workings of ourselves
    Do I
    march home to no drumbeat
    and expect to be donned a hero
    walk past the haze and battlefields
    to wage new war
    on unsupecting hearts
    stealing beauty
    like a trained pickpocket, who
    the frivolity of the art.

    Submitted on 2009-11-09 23:49:58     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Incredible. amazing. truly something to re-read.
    I enjoyed the beginning. But loved the vocab. seriously good. I really was amazed to noticed your incredible vocab.
    | Posted on 2009-11-10 00:00:00 | by PopRocksRae | [ Reply to This ]

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