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We wage war on unsuspecting hearts

Author: silentpoison
ASL Info:    22/F/Teh Shire
Elite Ratio:    2.67 - 204 /259 /118
Words: 134
Class/Type: Poetry /Misc
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We wage war on unsuspecting hearts

Where do i go from here?
When all this is over
and the civil war done
we pull back from fireign land
with no profit won
no further knowledge of ourselves
and only the mine fields left
after all the soldiers are packed
in crates
the field will lie
How to sleep
without the bombs whistle
guns blast
and cries of agony from
the innermost workings of ourselves
Do I
march home to no drumbeat
and expect to be donned a hero
walk past the haze and battlefields
to wage new war
on unsupecting hearts
stealing beauty
like a trained pickpocket, who
the frivolity of the art.

Submitted on 2009-11-09 23:49:58     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  Incredible. amazing. truly something to re-read.
I enjoyed the beginning. But loved the vocab. seriously good. I really was amazed to noticed your incredible vocab.
| Posted on 2009-11-10 00:00:00 | by PopRocksRae | [ Reply to This ]

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