Life as a Spectator Sport

Author: silentpoison ASL Info:    22/F/Teh Shire Elite Ratio:    2.67 - 204 /259 /118 Words: 130

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Life as a Spectator Sport

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WHen its kickoff time The tension is high The thrill of the pint The chase and the hunt IT's just a game they'll say From sun up TIll down But has anyone ever really won There's three seconds left Fourth Quarter, Three downs Do we run it in Or go for the field goal Sweating bullets They let the ball fly While I'm Sitting on the sidelines Watching colors flash by Lookin on like no other Ambilancy at it's best Only comprehending Life as a spectator sport It's not a game for us all So i'll live vicariously Flying with no purpose like that ball

Submitted on 2009-11-09 23:53:05     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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again...great vocab. I liked it but wasn't completly blown away like the last poem I commented on. however it was just as good. I enjoyed the ending, though the beginning was a little awkard. overall...a good poem. -Rachel:)

| Posted on 2009-11-10 00:00:00 | by PopRocksRae | [ Reply to This ]

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