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    dots Submission Name: Life as a Spectator Sport dots
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    Author: silentpoison
    ASL Info:    22/F/Teh Shire
    Elite Ratio:    2.67 - 204/259/118
    Words: 130
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsLife as a Spectator Sport dots
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    WHen its kickoff time
    The tension is high
    The thrill of the pint
    The chase and the hunt
    IT's just a game they'll say
    From sun up
    TIll down
    But has anyone ever really won
    There's three seconds left
    Fourth Quarter, Three downs
    Do we run it in
    Or go for the field goal
    Sweating bullets
    They let the ball fly
    While I'm
    Sitting on the sidelines
    Watching colors flash by
    Lookin on like no other
    Ambilancy at it's best
    Only comprehending
    Life as a spectator sport
    It's not a game for us all
    So i'll live vicariously
    Flying with no purpose
    like that ball




    Submitted on 2009-11-09 23:53:05     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      again...great vocab.
    I liked it but wasn't completly blown away like the last poem I commented on. however it was just as good. I enjoyed the ending, though the beginning was a little awkard. overall...a good poem.
    -Rachel:)
    | Posted on 2009-11-10 00:00:00 | by PopRocksRae | [ Reply to This ]


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