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    dots Submission Name: The Darkdots
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    Author: LaxGoalie
    Elite Ratio:    2.51 - 6/4/8
    Words: 195
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsThe Darkdots
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    You are the nightmare I run away from.
    You are the dark, the evil, the anger.
    The one that led me astray,
    Left me somewhere and decided to go away.

    Memories still haunt me,
    Memories of our time together.
    I would rather forget them,
    But I canít bring myself so far.
    People told me to burn your pictures,
    To destroy everything that reminded me of you.

    To put it lightly, you destroyed me,
    Dragged me through the dirt and threw me out to dry.
    Cut away all my lifelines, unplugged my life support.
    Your silence breaks me down, makes me ache all over.
    A thousand words of sorrow could not save me now,
    This was hopeless from the start.

    Did you ever think about the consequences?
    Think about what you might do to me?
    Spend a minute of your life asking yourself if this was the right thing to do?

    Constricted is what I feel,
    Torn up between emotions.
    Love, hate, anger, sadness, disappointment, fury.
    The past canít be turned back,
    So itís time to move on.
    To close one door and open another.




    Submitted on 2009-11-10 16:40:23     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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