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    dots Submission Name: Bottled Updots
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    Author: XxSkyelerxX
    ASL Info:    12/Female/Varies
    Elite Ratio:    3.07 - 11/27/16
    Words: 28
    Class/Type: Poetry/
    Total Views: 719
    Average Vote:    4.5000
    Bytes: 262



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    dotsBottled Updots
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    Bottled up,
    Never seen.
    Hidden emotions
    All the lies
    Thoughts unraveling
    Your demise
    Hopes crushed,
    Mouths hushed.
    Screams silent
    Wishing again,
    Wishing the end.
    Bottled up, never seen.




    Submitted on 2009-11-10 18:53:38     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Natural talent takes time to hone. Even the most seasoned writers revise and revise. You can use what you have here as a launching point, or you can leave it the way it is. I can't say this enough; It's up to you! You don't have to write a masterpiece to get out what is on the inside. Writing is as much catharsis as it is anything else. I think you have a really strong to ability to create great images with simple words. Keep working with it!
    | Posted on 2009-11-11 00:00:00 | by Jemma Dumptruck | [ Reply to This ]
      Ignore Jace (TasteMyRainbow). I like it
    | Posted on 2009-11-10 00:00:00 | by Tesana | [ Reply to This ]
      THIS WAS [censored]ING HORRABLE!
    I FELT LIKE BRITTNEY SPEARS WAS GETTING HER WEAVE FIXED WHEN SHE WAS WRITING THIS SHIT!



    Or you had a bottle up your ass, like that stupid [censored] vampire in twilight.
    Contsapated whore..<.<
    Get some skill...
    | Posted on 2009-11-10 00:00:00 | by TasteMyRainbow | [ Reply to This ]


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