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    dots Submission Name: Notice Medots
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    Author: juss_kriss
    ASL Info:    23/F/Canada
    Elite Ratio:    3.87 - 404/445/126
    Words: 259
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Longing
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    Description:
       about someone i was always able to look up to and thought would always be there for me. this person played a huuuuuuge role in my life but lately they've been pushing not only me, but practically everyone else away too.

    i wonder if you can figure out who it is?


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    dotsNotice Medots
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    v1.
    i'd never say i hate you
    but i'm starting to feel that way
    after the hard times we've been through
    how could you just turn yourself away
    you were always the one i looked up to
    the one i always could run to
    but as these days fade away
    i can feel myself fading too
    can you hear me calling for you ?

    ch.
    i'm standing right in front of you
    can't you see me
    how loud do you expect me to screan
    before you even notice me
    i needed you
    i thought you'd be here for me
    but i'm left standing alone
    how loud do you want me to scream
    do you even notice me
    notice me

    v2.
    i never thought i'd leave you
    but now i've got to get myself out
    i'd try to explain it to you
    you don't know what i'm talking about
    the hole in my hearts' just become too big
    these wounds are too deep to forgive
    and as i keep on bleeding
    the mask i'm wearing is slipping too
    can you see me begging for you ?

    br.
    is the image in your head all you can see
    is the reflection in the mirror the only one you have time for
    is the person you wish to become above me
    cause suddenly i'm the least of your worries
    my hero, no not anymore
    when you've become the only one
    that you're fighting for

    co.
    how loud do you expect me to scream




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    ||| Comments |||
      A very powerful piece Kriss. I especially liked the lines:
    "is the image in your head all you can see
    is the reflection in the mirror the only one you have time for"
    It seems that is the way many people turn out and it is painful to watch the transition and loose someone close to their own self obsession. This definitely had a good feel for the context, a bit rough and quick paced which matched the circumstances and helped put the reader in the subjects mindset. Great work as always kriss, keep writing.
    Sarah
    | Posted on 2016-07-06 00:00:00 | by S.A.M. | [ Reply to This ]


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