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    dots Submission Name: Enough Passion To Forgetdots

    Author: Abort_Chaotic
    ASL Info:    19 almost 20
    Elite Ratio:    3.41 - 201/172/50
    Words: 211
    Class/Type: Poetry/
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       Lost my love and my best friend on one gloomy fall day.

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    dotsEnough Passion To Forgetdots

    Into suffocating,
    this noose's tightening,
    slipping off this step off over the edge,
    to solemnly break this pledge,
    No longer familiar with this person,
    who looks back at him in the reflection,
    once a boy, living in a cloud of rejection.
    Now just a confused man wearing an endless frown,
    finding that the only way out is "down."

    Breaking the line of formality,
    embracing what was,
    this is what a broken man does.
    Endless love that he always shared.
    Tucked back again to a corner of constant despair,
    a man in reality, with a succumbed mentality.

    Wallowing with pockets full of sorrow,
    will reign in on his soul again tomorrow.
    Expecting too much & Loving her with it all,
    not foreseeing that day this fall.

    What's there left to see?
    Two eyes blind and one eye to set me free.
    It takes bombs to forget one mans deeds,
    it takes a lifetime to forget that we didn't succeed.
    Till decomposed and pushing up the weeds,

    Wheres the way to heal,
    Heart breaking this lurid ordeal.
    Quaking this tragically riddled crevasse,
    rocks a tumbling down to crush all of what he once felt.
    Trampling right through the air so death can be dealt.

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