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This was written after years in the wilderness. Hope you understand it.
Forever the night that steals from lovers
Tomorrow says heaven, yesterday the gulf
Shores of the mind, together in space
Losing at life, healing in time
Forever the thief that steals the word.
When is the proud man turning
Floundering in hopelessness
Comprehending nothing at all
Glad to be forgetting his way
Today is the curse of mankind.
Moving minds from here to there
Treading steps that disappear
Terrified men crying out for hope
Helpless to mean what comes next
You’re lost in Limbo.
Never lose courage.
Forever the night that steals from enemies
To take back pride
Beware the power of thought
To change life’s ambition
Cruelty need not apply.
To be submissive is not approved
For religion, faith is no more
When time is gone love can reign
Water flows through in waves
Friendship reveres no shame.
Never lose hope.
When men stand united
Knowledge can stand alone
Pleasure will fill the void
Hearts can feel no pain
Youth respect the old.
Forever the man who steals from death
He alone will bring salvation
Treasure every aspect and visage
Tomorrow is gone, yesterday is come
Forever the day that steals from the future
Nevermore says he who must kneel
And fight to keep his sanity
Nevermore says he who loves not wisely
But too well
Render unto life that which is living
Submitted on 2009-11-12 10:22:09
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I like it:) Your very talented, great choice of words:)
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