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    dots Submission Name: Foreverdots
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    Author: ModestyB
    Elite Ratio:    2.25 - 64/38/31
    Words: 247
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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       This was written after years in the wilderness. Hope you understand it.


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    Forever

    Forever the night that steals from lovers
    Tomorrow says heaven, yesterday the gulf
    Shores of the mind, together in space
    Losing at life, healing in time
    Forever the thief that steals the word.

    When is the proud man turning
    Floundering in hopelessness
    Comprehending nothing at all
    Glad to be forgetting his way
    Today is the curse of mankind.

    Moving minds from here to there
    Treading steps that disappear
    Terrified men crying out for hope
    Helpless to mean what comes next
    You’re lost in Limbo.

    Never lose courage.

    Forever the night that steals from enemies
    To take back pride
    Beware the power of thought
    To change life’s ambition
    Cruelty need not apply.

    To be submissive is not approved
    For religion, faith is no more
    When time is gone love can reign
    Water flows through in waves
    Friendship reveres no shame.

    Never lose hope.

    When men stand united
    Knowledge can stand alone
    Pleasure will fill the void
    Hearts can feel no pain
    Youth respect the old.

    Forever the man who steals from death
    He alone will bring salvation
    Treasure every aspect and visage
    Tomorrow is gone, yesterday is come
    Forever the day that steals from the future

    Nevermore says he who must kneel
    And fight to keep his sanity
    Nevermore says he who loves not wisely
    But too well
    Render unto life that which is living





    Submitted on 2009-11-12 10:22:09     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I like it:) Your very talented, great choice of words:)
    | Posted on 2009-11-13 00:00:00 | by rosealiehale | [ Reply to This ]


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