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    dots Submission Name: Longingdots

    Author: LiChan
    ASL Info:    18/f/in my reality
    Elite Ratio:    3.26 - 9/6/12
    Words: 181
    Class/Type: Prose/Longing
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    I call out for you
    In the darkness
    In the gloom
    I call out for you

    But you still donít hear
    You never seem to hear
    Everything I say
    You donít hear

    If I fall again
    Will you catch me
    Or will you not see
    If I fall again

    Quietly the weed is sown
    Into the fallenís home
    Waiting for the time
    When the weed is sown

    Silently the power grows
    Inside you and me
    Can you feel it
    As the power grows

    The quiet passing comes
    Without any thought of you
    It leaves your body with no soul
    As the passing comes

    And I need the fire you have
    I need it to warm my soul
    Because I canít do this without you
    I canít make it on my own

    I need you to keep going
    I need to live with you here
    No one else will do
    No one else here but you

    Will you be here soon
    My love will you see
    The fire you have
    Will be my savior

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