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Submission Name:
The Fall of Summer
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Author:
takenspiritwind
ASL Info:
21/F/NH
Elite Ratio:
4.35 - 117/95/38
Words:
89
Class/Type:
Poetry/Nature
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Prob one of my best pieces I've ever written in a while.
The Fall of Summer
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Foliage falling
nature's calling
Summer's closed her eyes.
Tears streaming
power's weaning
Summer prepares goodbyes.
Gaining power
every hour
Fall rises from his sleep.
Never aging
forever waging
Both Fall and Summer weep.
Ever desiring
time transpiring
Summer can't hold Fall.
Tender lust
unspoken trust
passing moments enthrall.
Stolen breaths
uncertain deaths
their love never ending.
Stolen kiss
ageless bliss
one not both ascending.
Love dying
terror prying
their love not meant to be.
Hushed good byes
sincere sighs
to this they did agree.
Submitted on 2009-11-12 22:52:32
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