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    dots Submission Name: The Fall of Summerdots
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    Author: takenspiritwind
    ASL Info:    21/F/NH
    Elite Ratio:    4.35 - 117/95/38
    Words: 89
    Class/Type: Poetry/Nature
    Total Views: 477
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    Description:
       Prob one of my best pieces I've ever written in a while.


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    dotsThe Fall of Summerdots
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    Foliage falling
    nature's calling
    Summer's closed her eyes.
    Tears streaming
    power's weaning
    Summer prepares goodbyes.

    Gaining power
    every hour
    Fall rises from his sleep.
    Never aging
    forever waging
    Both Fall and Summer weep.

    Ever desiring
    time transpiring
    Summer can't hold Fall.
    Tender lust
    unspoken trust
    passing moments enthrall.

    Stolen breaths
    uncertain deaths
    their love never ending.
    Stolen kiss
    ageless bliss
    one not both ascending.

    Love dying
    terror prying
    their love not meant to be.
    Hushed good byes
    sincere sighs
    to this they did agree.




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