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    dots Submission Name: Turtledots

    Author: ruejacobs
    ASL Info:    39/feminazi/Gehenna
    Elite Ratio:    4.82 - 619/473/167
    Words: 205
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
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       it's about the Grand-Wendy

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    c. by ruejacobs Friday the 13th, November 13th 2009:

    Turtle, her mother says and so turtle I am
    I could imagine how the armor I've donned
    could be mistaken for a shell
    and because she, too, is an underwater being
    I am in good company.

    She is round as the earth
    Minus her tail,
    and twisting like a hurricane
    inside her motherís belly
    oh, I have seen her before
    in mirrors and lakes
    in crystal balls
    and the blue orb
    of her own motherís newborn eyes long ago
    round as the circle a technician has drawn
    to delineate her skull
    I have seen her a thousand timesÖ

    But this one, this one
    Will be saved
    A child who will know her Father and Mother
    Who will not be torn or turned from either
    Who will know love and gentleness
    And will never know fear

    My daughter, conjures heaven on earth
    Behold the miracle:
    A child born of my line
    Who will be nurtured and adored!

    Let me be a turtle, then
    Let the armor I wear protect her small family
    Insulate her mother and father
    And nurture their perfect underwater home

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      quite like this...the hare hurries through life with reckless abandon...the turtle much more careful and slow, protecting itself..

    yours protects family..often going into a shell is conotated in a bad way..but this is good definition...the mother protecting all her family..

    and talking about the child being raised in a family that is actually together...how refreshing that idea is...unfortunately...families tend to swim in so many different direction..

    being a turtle lover..i loved this analogy.
    | Posted on 2011-02-26 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]

    and you will be busy knitting small things - with tortoise shell needles no doubt...

    it is clear because your language is clear and i like that i can understand the way the wider family responds to a call for protection: in the way that meerkats might or porpoise.

    i have always found you this way: even when getting all mythical on my arse: you write in a way that i relate to immediately and more often than not it is a language not dissimilar to mine - maybe that's it?

    and you should get back to figuring out where the turtle motif might fit in that quilt you're building!

    take care rue,

    | Posted on 2009-12-12 00:00:00 | by Awkward | [ Reply to This ]
      I wanted to live this once, never did... until I lived a piece of it in this writing again. What a bittersweet smile it brought me... sour apple candy to suck like a snakebite. Failures come to my mind in this, but only my own.

    This is really uplifting, loving, warm, secularly comforting, and everything opposite of my first paragraph, of course.... I'm just a headfvcked lima bean when it comes to things that move me.

    This leaves me so twisted, this may be the worst comment I've ever left, and for that I apologize.
    | Posted on 2009-11-13 00:00:00 | by Runes | [ Reply to This ]

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