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    dots Submission Name: "Don"dots

    Author: Clayman
    ASL Info:    28 - getting late
    Elite Ratio:    6.34 - 609/327/167
    Words: 191
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 579
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       Written for Donald Adams

    This guy is so cool in all he does i just love his work...

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    Heaven churned with hope
    as the stars spoke his name,
    asking his hand in orchestra.
    He smiled with a nod, ready.
    In the things he felt for them
    they needed no proof of life,
    so he listened to each song,

    Chirping choirs of recognition
    whispered secrets into him
    knitting promises for him to wear.
    The skies were his life's lore
    so he gazed with infant's eyes
    seeing only blessings.

    It started to build pressure slowly,
    the madness others implied on him
    yet married so surely themselves
    by denying ears to his deep dreams
    and pushing him away .

    Celestial voices, soothing
    and comforting persisted,
    calming and reassuring
    as their visits frequented.
    With soothing melodic love
    they mended his strength.
    Passion faltered naught.

    Today a brave pioneer is commended,
    embraced by a kindred folk of many.
    His promises fulfilled, he stands lightly,
    he shared with all each colorful stellar gift
    and gave their glowing bodies rythm.

    Renewed in spirit, he yearns the taste
    of the next journey not yet told.

    The stars spoke his name
    and he listened.


    Submitted on 2009-11-13 07:06:38     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      its a really fantastic ode to someone named Don. Ive lots of Don's in my life both my grandfathers were, one i can only remember his deep laughter as he pushed me on a tire swing. thats it. the second was a great influence, a quiet man who had a big heart. the third is my uncle don who just had a heart attack last week. he a collage of a man- musician, engineer, farmer, meth-addict, religious fanactic...hes got a great mind and perhaps a good heart, i dont know him all that well anymore, but i remember him teaching me to play guitar and how to catch a football as a reward for getting all my multiplication tables right. thank you for the write. it was a nice read since it let me indulge over a man who is such a mystery to me now but was so influencial when i was younger. - Ash.
    | Posted on 2009-12-09 00:00:00 | by SincerWritinAsh | [ Reply to This ]
      This is really pretty... I was trying to find some of the sounds, all I found on You Tube was some guy's response to him... seems he didn't like him, it wasn't especially kind.

    I'm really curious now.
    | Posted on 2009-11-13 00:00:00 | by Runes | [ Reply to This ]
      this is gorgeous. i wish i could meet Don, he sounds like a bright shining guy. very pretty.
    | Posted on 2009-11-13 00:00:00 | by Theophilus | [ Reply to This ]

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