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    dots Submission Name: Umbilical Corddots
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    Author: AeThe Lost Poet
    ASL Info:    19/M/DE
    Elite Ratio:    3.6 - 147/184/122
    Words: 119
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 547
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 747



    Description:
       This is purely off the top of my head.... you can kinda tell if you notice- i didnt really seperate parts where i rhyme and restart my phrases (idk you'll fig it out)


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    dotsUmbilical Corddots
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    First, lets be permissible
    Hold that residual thought
    As I constrict down my umbilical cord
    Fill the ensemble
    Fill in the void
    Society, in such piety
    So spill the noise
    Is it just me?
    Or do strict lines convict me
    To be nothing more then a colored kid
    SO fix me.
    With a pen,
    or as-- you another person with a page
    who can’t spill out their soul,
    with nothing but rage….
    So look this is destiny,
    Hope for the rest of us
    Time tells investedly,
    who’s.. well… just Impetuous
    this is off the dome, so you know
    when I write its real…
    I’m not mad for the fight
    It’s just the fight is real…




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