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    dots Submission Name: Windows to your souldots
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    Author: Jessica Lynn
    ASL Info:    22/f/mn
    Elite Ratio:    2.86 - 121/119/57
    Words: 413
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Serious
    Total Views: 572
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 2384



    Description:
       I thought it would be rather interesting to write a song in the character of a guy. :)


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    dotsWindows to your souldots
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    It was raining on the black top,
    I was soaking in the cold.
    The wind was singing to me,
    And suddenly I felt so old.

    I looked at her, and she looked down.
    I could tell that she was scared.
    We both knew what was happening,
    When the silence hung in the air.

    I canít do this anymore-
    Her words fell down with the rain.
    I told her that I understood,
    I told her I was okay.

    For a moment she just looked at me-
    And shook her head in disbelief.
    I knew that soon sheíd ask me why,
    When she did I could only reply:

    Beautiful dreamer,
    I know why you go.
    I never saw forever
    In the windows to your soul.

    I canít say I wonít miss you,
    But I thought that you should know-
    I know Iíd never make you happy-
    So we have to let this go-
    I see it in the windows to your soul.

    I saw the tears leave her eyes,
    And fall down her face.
    I was comforted by thought,
    That someone better would take my place.

    So we went our separate ways,
    And in the cold, wind, and rain-
    Alone on that dark November day,
    I did my best to explain-

    Beautiful dreamer,
    I know why you go.
    I never saw forever
    In the windows to your soul.

    I canít say I wonít miss you,
    But I thought that you should know-
    I know Iíd never make you happy-
    So we have to let this go-
    I see it in the windows to your soul.

    Six months later,
    In the late days of May-
    I saw her walking with a bunch of friends
    But I didnít know what to say.

    When she saw me standing my myself,
    She smiled at me, and broke through the crowd.
    She said thank you so much for what youíve done,
    Finally I see the sun!
    I said I donít know what you mean-
    She said remember what you said to me?

    Beautiful dreamer,
    I know why you go.
    I never saw forever
    In the windows to your soul.

    I canít say I wonít miss you,
    But I thought that you should know-
    I know Iíd never make you happy-
    So we have to let this go-
    I see it in the windows to your soul.




    Submitted on 2009-11-14 17:34:23     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      I liked this. It was very deep and very passionate. Awesome.
    | Posted on 2009-11-14 00:00:00 | by KindredSpirit | [ Reply to This ]


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