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    dots Submission Name: Menacing reflectiondots

    Author: Jessica Lynn
    ASL Info:    22/f/mn
    Elite Ratio:    2.86 - 121/119/57
    Words: 210
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Serious
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    dotsMenacing reflectiondots

    Light, little whispers of,
    Words far too cruel to say.
    The voice inside my head is mine,
    So itís hard to push it all away.

    When reality ceases to
    Be clear enough for me.
    Alter egoís taking hold,
    I can hardly breathe!

    But I wonít be another victim,
    Drowning in insecurity.
    I wonít let that demon in here,
    Poison of insanity!

    Those closest to me think Iím crazy,
    Now Iím starting to agree.
    Cuz every time Iím feeling angry,
    It starts happening to me!

    Hateful thoughts, they fuel the burning;
    I can feel the fire behind my eyes.
    Clench my fists to keep from screaming,
    Maybe I can stop this, if I try!

    Cuz I wonít be another victim,
    Drowning in insecurity.
    I wonít let that demon in here,
    Poison of insanity.

    Cuz I canít look into the mirror.
    Cold, dark eyes that arenít much clearer.
    Reflection glares across the distance
    Ceasing space and timeís existence.
    I can hear that image laughing,
    With the sound of the glass cracking.
    Turn my cheek to this delusion,
    Run away from this confusion.

    I wonít be another victim,
    Drowning in insecurity.
    I wonít let that demon in here,
    Poison of insanity.

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      hi i liked this your word usage to dicribe the different emotions was what really puts the theme together

    well done

    | Posted on 2009-11-24 00:00:00 | by sandman | [ Reply to This ]
      This is excellent Jessica! It has very good form, structure, and rhyme scheme.

    It reflects a somber, and menacing theme; one that perhaps all of us have at times, when the voice of our demons cry loud to be heard.

    Nice work!
    | Posted on 2009-11-14 00:00:00 | by Ron Cole | [ Reply to This ]

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