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Menacing reflection


Author: Jessica Lynn
ASL Info:    22/f/mn
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Words: 210
Class/Type: Lyrics /Serious
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Menacing reflection



Light, little whispers of,
Words far too cruel to say.
The voice inside my head is mine,
So it’s hard to push it all away.

When reality ceases to
Be clear enough for me.
Alter ego’s taking hold,
I can hardly breathe!

But I won’t be another victim,
Drowning in insecurity.
I won’t let that demon in here,
Poison of insanity!

Those closest to me think I’m crazy,
Now I’m starting to agree.
Cuz every time I’m feeling angry,
It starts happening to me!

Hateful thoughts, they fuel the burning;
I can feel the fire behind my eyes.
Clench my fists to keep from screaming,
Maybe I can stop this, if I try!

Cuz I won’t be another victim,
Drowning in insecurity.
I won’t let that demon in here,
Poison of insanity.

Cuz I can’t look into the mirror.
Cold, dark eyes that aren’t much clearer.
Reflection glares across the distance
Ceasing space and time’s existence.
I can hear that image laughing,
With the sound of the glass cracking.
Turn my cheek to this delusion,
Run away from this confusion.

I won’t be another victim,
Drowning in insecurity.
I won’t let that demon in here,
Poison of insanity.




Submitted on 2009-11-14 17:36:29     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  hi i liked this your word usage to dicribe the different emotions was what really puts the theme together

well done

sandman
| Posted on 2009-11-24 00:00:00 | by sandman | [ Reply to This ]
  This is excellent Jessica! It has very good form, structure, and rhyme scheme.

It reflects a somber, and menacing theme; one that perhaps all of us have at times, when the voice of our demons cry loud to be heard.

Nice work!
| Posted on 2009-11-14 00:00:00 | by Ron Cole | [ Reply to This ]


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